Old sentence: Both Gay and Lin talk about the challenges they face through the way they believe categorizing perceives themselves or other people in the world.

New sentence: Both Gay and Lin talk about the challenges they face through the way other people in the world categorize them and how it makes them feel about themselves.

A strength from my paper is when I changed my thesis because it showed how I had a deeper thinking into my paper and taking an approach on confidence throughout the paper. A weakness I really need to workout on is my wording because it didn’t see confusing to me but the way I explained it was confusing to the reader. I remember in high school I seemed to struggle with rereading my work and looking for small errors in my paper. I think that I have analysis throughout my paper it’s just all the small working and spelling errors that hurt my paper.