I believe my writing and revision process has improved significantly since the beginning of the semester. I feel that my global revisions have improved since my first essay I wrote. In the beginning of the semester my thesis stamens have actually improved a lot because I really struggled with getting my thoughts down on the paper and coming up with specific things to argue. By practicing these writing methods my revision process has improved drastically with deepo9ng meaning and ideas to support my evidence. In my rough draft you can see highlighted in yellow is my revised thesis statement to better explain my point across. In my rough draft you can see that the thesis sentence does not make much sense and does not have much of an argument. In my final draft you can see I have a more concrete thesis by saying we can undertanding other through reserving judgment and showing genuine empathy. I also seemed to struggle with my transition sentence to quote when I first started writing but since then as you can see in the rough draft highlighted in red I said, “many people are labeled,” but I changed that to “many people, especially young women.” By doing this I made it more clear that the quote itself is more specific to women and not everyone. And in the second red highlighted sentence on the third page I added the words “in addition” to help transition from one though to the next which is very helpful for the flow of the essay. As for my global revisions highlighted in orange, you can see on my rough draft compared to my final draft, my revision helped to better explain why I included the quote. I did not want to take the quote out completely so by changing my wording I wanted to show that young women should not feel like they have to hold themselves back. If they challenge these ideas they will feel more confident with their self identity in life. In the paper this was more of the major global revisions I made to help clarify my paper by bringing it to the next level with deeper analysis. As the semester comes to an end, I feel like the way I approach my revision has become stronger than in the beginning. I feel that I am able to big deeper into the meaning of quotes and my analysis by identifying global revisions in my paper. This has made me aware that revising papers is more than just spelling and grammar issues too. By developing this writing skill, not only have I developed into a better writer for the future, but I feel that I will also be more conscious about global revisions in my papers.